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Blondbraid

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Any thoughts on improving this character?
« on: 15 Dec 2018, 13:27 »
I've been toying with the idea for a new character for some time now, and tried drawing a sprite for her:

(She's meant to be a tourist on a tropical island who gets involved in a mystery that makes her explore the ruins and wilderness on said island)
I'm not quite happy with the result but can't quite put my finger on what I'm unhappy with so I'm asking for some constructive criticism.

jahnocli

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Re: Any thoughts on improving this character?
« Reply #1 on: 15 Dec 2018, 13:33 »
For me, the top half of the body is ok, but the legs are unconvincing, with insufficient structure.

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Re: Any thoughts on improving this character?
« Reply #2 on: 15 Dec 2018, 15:12 »
I think she lacks warm colors. It could be less noticeable in game. One way to add them would be to tweak the color of her skin.

« Last Edit: 16 Dec 2018, 10:43 by Creamy »
 

Blondbraid

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Re: Any thoughts on improving this character?
« Reply #3 on: 17 Dec 2018, 15:08 »

Thanks for your input, I tried redrawing her legs and make her skin a warmer hue. Better?

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Re: Any thoughts on improving this character?
« Reply #4 on: 17 Dec 2018, 20:38 »
I think the problem is that with a dark skin colour and dark outlines her facial features are hard to see. You could either try to make her skin lighter, like Creamy did, or keep the skin dark and make the lines or highlights with a brighter colour.
I also like the edit Creamy did on her eyes.

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Re: Any thoughts on improving this character?
« Reply #5 on: 23 Dec 2018, 06:44 »
Just a finicky personal opinion: The breasts could be better aligned, and the fold that the shirt makes at shoulder height breaks the silhouette. Totally agree with a lighter skin tone, to see better the black lines of the face.

Blondbraid

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Re: Any thoughts on improving this character?
« Reply #6 on: 07 Jan 2019, 16:12 »

I haven't found the time to work with the holidays and all that, but I've updated the sprite after the feedback.
I tried lightening the skin a little bit, but I don't want to stray too far from my initial concept.